Directions: after you have presented your theses to the class, type up the workshopped/edited thesis and your four reasons/topic sentences. For this week, you will not be required to comment on your classmates' blogs, but I would encourage you to review your classmates' blogs, in case you are still struggling.
Due by 10pm the day you present your thesis. So, if you present on Tuesday, the blog will be due at 10pm that night. If you present on Thursday, the blog will be due by 10pm that night.
5 points for being on time
5 points for following directions (you must have at least four reasons to support your thesis)
The excerpt of “Learning to Read” by Malcom X depicted the productive mindset of X while in prison. He studied the dictionary and academic readings until he had a full understanding of what each meant. By doing so, he effectively conveyed information on the issues with the nation’s history.
ReplyDeleteIn "Why I Stopped Being a Vegetarian," by Laura Fraser, she uses her language and tone to show how young girls should not choose the wrong identity.
ReplyDelete-Her tone is humors which keeps the text light.
-She makes the sympathy go towards her friends and acquaintances.
-Her use of words does reach out to the younger demographic.
-Her language is that she uses not so much of strong language.
Laura Fraser's presentation of her discomfort with being in the wrong identity lacks a clear purpose, which might confuse her audience.
ReplyDeleteShe includes many vegetarian related facts.
The facts that are used aren't necessarily related to her thesis.
She uses some facts that are either vague, not cited, or both.
She uses her own experience as soft evidence.
In “Scholarship Boy,” Richard Rodriquez uses word choice and tone to successfully encourage us to avoid the loss of identity he encountered during his quest for education.
ReplyDelete1. Rodriguez shares his innermost thoughts with us because he regrets his actions from the past.
2. When introducing himself as a “Scholarship Boy” he chooses negative vocabulary to illustrate his point of view.
3. Once he describes his relationship with his family his tone is of someone that is ashamed.
4. His sorrow can be felt when he talks about his lost relationship with his family.
Thesis: In the essay “Learning to Read”, Malcolm X presents an effective argument through language and tone by conveying that, during his time in prison, he was able to self-educate.
ReplyDelete1. Malcolm X uses the prison library to get a firm grasp on many things.
2. X’s words argued his main point effectively.
3. Throughout his examples, X proved to his audience why getting a good grasp on what they’re reading can be a good thing.
4. X’s background provided a nice hook to persuade his audience into believing this thesis.
Thesis: Vonnegut effectively appeals to beginning writers through engaging language and tone to demonstrate how to successfully write with style. He relates to his audience through his own experiences to show how his methods have worked for him.
ReplyDeleteReasons:
He uses colorful, upbeat, and entertaining language to hook his audience and keep them engaged.
He speaks directly to his audience in an empowering way to make them think and feel more comfortable about their writing.
He shares memories of being a beginning writing and feeling exasperated and uses that to relate to his audience.
He also relates to his audience by talking about how he has followed these guidelines and how they have made him successful. (I am not 100% sure this is pathos...)
In “Learning to Read” Malcom X uses encouraging descriptions of how he taught himself how to read and write. However, when he describes what he learned his language and tone become bitter, which could narrow his audience.
ReplyDeleteMalcom X detail how he educated himself by using the prison educational resources.
He discusses the importance of self-motivation to inspire the young scholars that nothing comes easy.
His language and tone become acrimonious because of what he learned.
X education in prison awakened him to not just a passion for reading, but to his accountability to help black American.
In the essay “Learning to Read”, Malcolm X builds trust with his audience in order to succefully argues how people can achieve their goals and how education can set people free. Malcolm X describes how he educated himself in order to overcome his struggle and builds a better future for himself and open mind to others so they can take his path. He uses his own impact of life while he was in prison to inspire his audience around the globe especially the African Americans and those who grew or are growing the same as he did. He convinces them that nothing that is easy or will be easy, instead they have to step-up and work hard in order to achieve what they want. His Learning to Read essay connected himself to his readers. Malcolm X teaching himself to read in jail opened his eyes and mid toward changing the world where people comprehended that they all have the same equality.
ReplyDeleteLaura Fraser uses language and tone in “Why I Stopped Being a Vegetarian” to present the challenges she faced as she spent 15 years in the wrong identity.
ReplyDelete• Humorous tone throughout the text
• Big words but not very strong language
• Use of sympathy
• Tone makes her sound like she is a young adult, which helps her reach out to the younger audience